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  • Vibes: Great!
    • Bonus points  for NES booklet format AND embedded music.
    • Art/maps/general aesthetic very 8-bit.
    • Simple, clean layout.
    • Staple marks in center of spreads was a nice touch.
    • I love the simple, classic premise. Perfect for a game jam entry.
  • Inspiration: Clearly shows through and is well/concisely explained.
    • I would have preferred if the inspiration was up front, but I understand putting it at the end is probably better for actual use vs. game jam reviews.
    • I appreciated the shoutouts to other creators in the inspiration section - classy!
  • Usability: Solid, but some quality of life improvements might have helped a bit.
    • I like the clear, concise adventure overview right at the beginning.
    • Role-Playing tips (e.g., Wise woman, page "1") are a nice touch.
    • Hyperlinks to referenced items/creatures/page numbers in same document would be helpful.
    • Instead of suggested level, I saw you used "12 HD worth of Shadowdark Characters". I'm not sure how I feel about that (i.e., does it work?), but it's definitely an interesting idea!
    • Would prefer if relevant stat blocks were directly on the relevant page or (because I know space was limited, especially in the booklet) hyperlinks to the stats in the back would have worked too.

Final Thoughts: Really solid adventure, great 8 Bit vibes, and inspiration shows through and is explained clearly. Would benefit from a few some quality of life changes, but looks like it would be a blast to run as is. Good job! 

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I greatly apprecieate the amount of detail you have gone into not only on my adventure here, but also on every other adventure I have seen you give feedback on. You have done an amazing job of sharing concise, useful feedback, and the amount of effort you have put into every one is obvious. I hope you do so well in this jam, your adventure deserves it, and you deserve it as a collaborator in what everyone is working on doing here. Thank you so much for the thorough feedback, both on my adventure and on all the others I've seen you comment on.

Thanks, Connor! That's really kind of you to say. Glad you found the feedback to be useful, and best of luck to you with your entry!