(I played this game before it was removed from the jam and it being removed will not save you from having to hear my thoughts on it.)
This game has a really strong start, but it sets you up for failure. Case and point I didn't finish the demo (I made it to the bar). My first impression of this game was that it would have lots of sex. And it had a lot of reading. The main character is boring and I know you make jokes about this, but it does not change the fact he is boring. The writing is very dry. The main character does not really have a goal. There are no steaks. He wants to make hell a better place but you don't elaborate on that. The characters don't do a lot to stand out. The first real character we are introduced to has the personality "Slutty." I liked the sex scenes, I see why you front loaded the game with one, the rest of the story is a bit boring. You should give the main character a prominent goal and flaw. Ie: "Only the person at the top can fix things so I am not even going to try until I am at the top. Anyone who tries to fix things from anywhere other than the top is wasting their time." Then give each girl a problem they are trying to fix from the bottom and you have to help them at first you try to fix everything from the top down, but realize that does actually work grow and learn along side the girls to overcome all of the problems and have sex along the way. You can disagree with me but there is just too much dialog. They talk and talk and never say anything.
"If you're going to kink shame me, I'd prefer to get my work done."
"Oh, yeah, it'd be a real shame if the paperwork wasn't filled out correctly. Perhaps it would even cause a total collapse of Hell just because Malacoda decided to stop filling out paperwork."
"You know damn well that bureaucracy is the bread and butter of the torture we do to all white-collar humans on earth."
"The amount of agony we collect from them visiting the DMV in one day is enough to power hell for weeks!"
"Mark my words, Rubicante! One day, I'll be the head of the Eighth Circle Department. I'll ensure the coffee isn't freezing when I make it to work. How does one manage to make the coffee cold in Hell?"
"You know Ciri makes the coffee. She was all hooves less than three years ago. Cut her a break."