This was definitely a fascinating and captivating game. The art style and the music work together incredibly well. The oddness and stillness and isolation are an excellent combination. I was fascinated and tried playing it 3 times. I do agree with one of the other commenters here, the note was hard to read. It was a lot of type, I think using a geometric sans serif font may have been a better option or just increasing the leading since the lines of words are realllly close together. That is only because the entire game I am feeling pressured to move quickly and to get the tasks done, so stopping to read the note feels like it's slowing me down too much from the tasks I need to do, if that makes sense. I stopped playing after my 3rd loss because I received my 2nd note, and then got a game over screen. The game over's felt arbitrary to me, if you could add a little note at the end that says "Game Over" and underneath says "You forgot to eat" or "You forgot to sleep" or something that let me know why I lost, that would have helped. For doing this in 48 hours tho, this is incredibly impressive! I am fascinated by the style, the weird gameplay, trying to accomplish slow tasks quickly, and trying to survive. It strikes a fascinating balance and it feels isolated without feeling eerie. Excellent work!
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Thank you so much! This feedback is super helpful, some of the most constructive criticism I have received. I did think about the note issue because its a management game, so maybe I will make time slow when your are reading and maybe add a magnifying glass or make the lines farther apart like you said. As for the game over screen, I can see how that would be frustrating. Glad you enjoyed it and I like to hear that you did multiple attempts! Thanks!