Reading this was a blast. I love the way the GUI is used. It was very creative, and the storytelling was compelling and gut-wrenching. It was a very fun read!
I love the usage of the cursor changing whenever a scene comes up to show Callie's state of mind and actions. It was really a unique design choice that a lot of the other comments have mentioned. I wonder if the designs were really intentional, to say the least.
Overall, a fun piece of work with cute girls <3