Thank you for the feedback and glad you enjoyed the experience thus far!
Completely agree about the dialogue, at times it can be somewhat bland or clunky in some places (Chapter one I think suffers the most) but it's something I'm improving the more I write.
As to the description to it being linear, I shall add that now. Thank you for the suggestion:)
I actually didn't think the dialogue was that clunky (although I can see what you mean in certain scenes), it's more that there were quite a bit of typos, missing commas and things like that.
Overall, I actually think that the content of the dialogue flowed pretty well. Sure, it felt slightly forced every now and then, but never to the point where it became a distraction. And most importantly (to me, at least), the scenes never lingered too long. Pacing is the hardest thing to perfect - and many otherwise amazing AVNs still suffer from it - but this game has done that really well so far.
