Love this game. Probably my favourite BE-focused game out there (in fierce competition with One Potion, Please). I wanted to share some of my thoughts.
The Delinquent never pulls her panties back up after the table scene unless you use a silicone tank (neither leaving her behind, blacking out, nor using Return to Safe Room does either). Maybe the player could be given a choice after the scene to have Jane point it out to her? In addition, as much as I love that scene overall, they seem a bit too oblivious, with too little to justify their distraction, at least for the Delinquent. Simply rewriting it to have them keep reading the papers on the table wouldn’t be too hard, but changing it to be something more distracting, like a BimbOS tablet or something, could potentially make even more sense. Maybe the Delinquent could decide to try her luck accessing the internet or something, given that it'd be the first tablet (aside from the ‘damaged’ rooftop one) that she’d have seen in the facility.
Regarding the Dev Note in room 29, I feel you’re too harsh on Idiot Plots. I understand that it’s personal preference, but as long as the decisions the characters make are in-character, and not the result of an Idiot Ball, it’s not bad writing. The scene is perfectly serviceable, I think, even if it could probably be written a little better. Perhaps it could work letting the Delinquent’s pre-fight banter be more hostile to give Nym-Foe more grounds to get physical, giving the Delinquent more reason to make another attempt at fighting despite knowing she doesn’t really stand a chance.
I also broke the game (on web) at one point, after rewatching the fight scene I opened another window and when I clicked back the game’s visuals were completely unresponsive, though I could still hear sounds and it still responded to input.