Good start! There was a typo with breakfast the next day after I slept "I should go make some brekfest". I kind of expected it to say my name instead of "You" but that still works. I was surprised that even though I ate in the lounge with Sophie who said she was open to company, that it was still 0/100 affection. When I was asked to clean the lounge, I was surprised that it was still very much clean, lol. It wasn't realistic to me that the bathroom would be locked because people have to go. "relley" is another typo when Sophie confides in us. The writing is okay. Overall, it has a kinda slow pace and doesn't always make sense (like why I can't go to the bathroom, lol). I think there's a lot of potential, especially with the graphics being your best feature. With some stronger writing and fewer typos, this would be on it's way to something really good.
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Thank you this is my first time doing this so it’s just a thing to dip my toe into my strong point is graphics and things like that I want to make something extra special I am already working on the full game and it is already looking 100x better! And this is a side project from other things so it new to me and thank you so much for your adivice and I have taken it one bored!