Voiceacting always is a bonus, but quality and pronunciation is not the best. The art style could be really nice, but all characters were still in T-pose, destroying the overall atmosphere in my opinion. It's great that you were able to create these things within such a short time. But it need much more polish to get clean and visually appealing. The story was also not quite clear (probably because I did not get the english in the beginning, but eventually the "5 seconds too late" fit.
Overall: Congrats on submitting this cutscene. It just needs more polish.