A nice and cute story, if a little cheesy at times. Appreciated the handmade art, though it's a bit simplistic at times. Things seemed to move a bit quickly, from a bland pre-party hangout to a blowout with a cartoonishly homophobic father, to a sudden injury that comes out of literally nowhere, then a confession that is then reciprocated by the MC despite no inclinations of the sort on the MC's side. It's a domino series of events that could have used a bit more smoothing over, but the plot works well for what it is. I was invested by the time the injury struck, especially when Emily's cool and confident personality came in and took over. This part was also when everyone's personalities shone the most. However, the confession felt really awkward to me, not so much on Charlie's part, but because Daniel kissing Charlie took me completely aback despite us playing as Daniel for most of the VN. It was sweet, yeah, but I was sure he was straight. Not a single hint of attraction in his narration, and Daniel was even utterly oblivious to the obvious signs during the confession, and then that kiss? Just felt too sudden. Enjoyed the VN despite the issues though, keep it up.
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Thanks for the feedback! I definitely agree with you on some of the smoothing issues, I could've definitely done a better job setting up events and making them feel more realistic. I'm glad you enjoyed the game regardless of some of the issues though! Especially the bathroom scene, it was probably my favorite to write. I'll keep your comments in mind if i do end up making another game :)