The story is mostly well written. I am glad you did not miss spell tongue. It does leave something to be desired. Loupcy is going back to her life and so is Fiona which is fine. Casual sex is fine. But Fiona didn't grow or change. Her love life sucks and she is sad and frustrated by that fact, and after this night it is going to go back to sucking. There was no indication anything changed. As someone who likes tall women I was a little disappointed when Loupcy grew it felt like, and I am sure this was not your intention, you were saying little people can not be sexually desirable because of their height (which is a real problem little people face). I am sure you just think tall girls are hot, but by having her start off three feet tall and growing before sex and shrinking after it does have a connotation I don't think you intended. I see what you were going for, but you missed the mark. Ironically I think the story was too short. If Fiona had a girl she liked but was scared to ask out and after her night with Loupcy found her worth and asked the girl out I would like the story much more. The main character is lacking an arc. As Smut I can easily give it an 8/10. As a story it left me feeling unsatisfied. It is one re-write from a 10/10.