'MR BIG' is a crazy wild ride, a unlikely fusion of erotica and body horror, where both genres support the other. Everything in this visual novel is really stylized, and I really dug the mash up of the photos to craft the sprites, it gives that vaporwave cover aesthetic while also allowing the body horror to be just a little bit more palatable for those that aren't into the full graphical fantasy. Also, this is surprisingly graphic, but in a really good way. The sex scenes are really well paced and the descriptions are both arousing and terrifying at the same time, I really dug them. The narrative and mystery that's in this visual novel is also really good too. There's the mystery of how Carter actually got so 'big', and peppering in all the subtle hints that you go back and point out is just really fun. The effect of changing up the text box when the deciphering the mystery was really effective use of the medium. I dig how you set up a few red herrings as well. There's also quite a lot of themes explored in this story, the overt ones like weighing the pros and cons of traditional masculinity and exploring the toxic elements of it. Even the subtle ones like Raleigh exploring non-conforming gender roles, I thought were really well done.
The few issues I have with the story are stuff like text box speed, where because of some stuttering I'd accidentally click ahead so I'd have to rewind to read what I missed. There's also the clunkiness of the view point switches, since I think that while Hartland is the main character for the majority of the story, I would get disoriented since Carter becomes the POV seemingly randomly or mid-conversation, especially in the opening sequence. Lastly, I think I got a bit confused at the mechanics of the dick growing 'mechanism' and how they were supposed to function in conjunction with the hypnosis tape. Like, is the 'mechanism' always attached, or is it only on some of the time, does he secretly have it on and if so, what is up with those times that he's in pain but there's no evidence of it there? Hartland's blackouts are also a bit too convenient for horror's sake, but I get that the story needed the convenience for the climatic reveal at the end. Overall, this is a really cool story, and I'm impressed with the concept and managing to get it almost to that tight script level (could tell that that time limit really kept ya from taking that one or two more passes). Still, amazing showing, I think you exceeded what you set out do to, looking forward to more from ya.