What a cool idea.
The concept is super solid, and you've captured a real vibe with the background music and the visuals. I do think that with a bit of improvement on the presentation (things like tutorials, more sounds/visual effects when things happen, etc...) would really elevate this to a real winner. There's definitely too much block-text reading in it's current form, but I understand that that's a compromise since I'm guessing you didn't have time for a full-blown tutorial.
Genuinely challenging at times and vibey. Hope you continue to work on it after the jam, would love to come back and play more!