'Project Buck' is a romance/comedy/thriller about a jealous sentient AI chat bot. Checking the user page, this appears to be your first visual novel, congrats on completing one. Some of the things that I liked about this entry were that you took the time and effort to create sprites and background assets, giving you some extra creative control. You took some big swings with this one, doing some straight up sex scenes and adding in a creative twist turning this rom-com into a thriller with the sentient AI coming for the protagonist in a jealous rage. You used an unusual aspect ratio for this VN, which makes me wonder if this was done due to the program you used to make the backgrounds only having this small of a screen, or if this was an attempt at an old-school feel with a 4:3 aspect ratio. For your next VN, I do have a few tips: While it's noble to try and create your own assets, unless there's a specific visual detail that you want to reference in your writing and have it be consistent with your sprites, try to opt for the free to use sprites and common license backgrounds. It'll save you time and effort to focus more on your story writing. What you might try to focus on in your next story is how you can immerse your reader. Try to evoke the five senses when establishing your setting by creating a mood or a tone. Like in this story, your main character is a loner NEET, what are the things that he would pay attention to as he's sitting in his computer chair? Which leads to another thing to think about when writing a story, fleshing out your characters to make them feel more 'real'. It's one thing to have a character say or do something, but there's better thing of understanding why they say or do something. When you know the 'why', then you know the 'how' to describe how they would go about doing and saying things. It's an earnest attempt, so now it's just about trying to do a little more with the next one.