This VN is a bit… weird. The way the characters interacted felt different in a way that took me a bit out of the story. Their hangups are explained later, so it’s well written but I couldn’t get as into it as I felt like it should, since the prose itself is really good.
For the visual part, the filter on the background works with the theme, same for the subtitle like “textbox”. However, it feels tacked on due to the theme of the jam, and the story itself doesn’t fit with that theme. (Also, the filter only being for the backgrounds and not affecting the text and sprites is a bit disappointing). Finally, the sprite fulfill just the bare minimum of being a VN. A lot of the story was just text on backgrounds.
The music and sound effects were really good in immersing us in the story, so I can’t stay it wouldn’t have lost a bit by being just written fiction.
Overall, I mostly talked about flaws, but I did like it! It wasn’t quite the kind of story I like to read, but the writing was very good. So good job!