Pretty good! I’ve no idea how much of what happened is true or not, but the horror worked well and the relations between the two characters is interesting. There are a few typos and weirdness in the prose, but it’s not bad.
The visual portion is well done. The shifts in the background and the black/red transitions really work in favor of the story. Rafael’s sprites being sketchy doesn’t really fit well with it, though. Some of Marco’s lines don’t have a side image, missing expression?
The music and sound effects work well, nothing special to say.
Overall, a really nice story that’s maybe missing a bit of context. Good job!