Oh my goodness dude! This is by far some of your best work. Love the vocals and just the whole song. You are so talented! The guitars and instruments work so well together with your voice.
I love the beginning dialogue, that really set the mood for the whole song. I really hope you will be able to finish this project. Its awesome. Crazy respect to you! Vocals are hard and you did a great job of mixing them.
You are a boss Einel. But as Kale said, the only thing that could be done to improve it is the mixing I think.