The voice acting is really well done and is an engaging intro to the track! I really like the direction you took on this jam’s theme. Full points for uniqueness from me! While I don’t feel equipped to comment on most of this given lack of experience in this genre (and there are some great comments I see below), I do have some formal vocal training and what struck me about your vocals is that it is clear that you understand the words that you are singing and that extra bit of emotional congruence goes a long way to grab ahold of me tight throughout the song and touched me on a very human level. I really like this as is, but I also am interested to hear what it would sound like with the orchestral accompaniment like you suggest. Tremolo swells at the “feeling tired” part feel like they would add rather than detract possibly? Good luck with finishing your project and thank you for sharing!