To start, the writing is noticeably rough. While I understand the story was translated into English, the result reads more like a first draft by someone still learning the language than an acceptable adaptation.
Example: "The thing is that we were both super dumb, we stole food and then Zac started flirting with me and I was super dumb too."
I’m left with the impression that this character is childlike in their thinking, though I can’t tell whether that’s intentional or a reflection of the writer’s own limitations. There are many grammatical issues like this throughout the story, including typos.
The story quickly veers into surreal territory and becomes difficult to make sense of. The main character goes from being on the brink of suicide to randomly meeting the lead of their favorite band, kissing them on the spot, performing on stage with the band, then shortly after, hooking up and doing hard drugs together. It’s a chaotic whirlwind that feels more like a fever dream than a coherent narrative. What follows is more extreme, and it all feels like it came out of the mind of a teenager.
The story is paired with an inconsistent art style, at times chibi and cartoonish, at other times more detailed and realistic. This tonal shift can be jarring, especially when it’s not clearly tied to narrative purpose.
The main character’s scars frequently disappear depending on the illustration. This is very distracting, especially when those scars are meant to carry emotional and narrative weight.
The imagery shown through the in-story app is presumably meant to represent photos taken by the character’s phone, yet the angles depicted would be impossible to achieve.
I’m being this critical because the surrounding praise creates a misleading impression, one that suggests this work is flawless, when in reality, it’s among the most deeply flawed experiences I’ve encountered. What’s most frustrating is the mishandling of serious subject matter. It’s not just disappointing; it’s offensive to see such weighty themes treated with so little care. Please do better.