Hi there. This is a nice little speedwrite game. It reminds me of being in the genre of people being pulled into video games that feel (and perhaps are) completely real and trying to work out how to finish the playthrough and leave back to reality. A few thoughts (with spoilers) and some typos below.
Typos:
hallway with very dim ligth
ligtly to even see if h s alive.
,,I dont have time
You walk trough the portal
Its an eerie
You presume that they have some kind of weapon but you don´t see it right away. (There’s something odd about your ‘ marks that you’ve used. I think they’re being treated as objects so sometimes the don and the t are on different lines.)
,,You have failed to progress
enter the 3rd game (I think this should be 4th)
Other thoughts:
It’d be good to have the option to look and get some description on the lava blocks so you can agonise a bit more about which one to choose.At the start it reads like you’re in a real world, but then switches to you know characters are NPCs. I’d stick to one or the other. Probably lean more into the video game aspect given you can “respawn” if you die.
Totally get this is a speed write game so it’s fine as is, but if you decided to do any more work to it after the comp, it’d be nice to have some alternate paths as it is designed to be a cyclical game that automatically circles you back to the start of the game rather than being presented more as a single read personalised novel.