Nice story telling through music, interesting combo of instrumentation used. I like the overall arrangement you did on every track. I think the main thing to look for is your chords voiciing and progression. The mix sounded nice but because you played triad chords on the pads at low registrer it will automatically sound muddy, spread the voicing you your problem is fixed. Other thing is just to watch for overall frequencie spectrum , sometimes there is too much highs on the hats and other instruments in track 2 for exemple, sometimes its too low like the beginning of first track. Nonetheless I like all the small details, sound design texture and even some VO. Good job !