I think the story is pretty interesting, although very dark. But the tonality of the voiceover (although the acting itself was fine) was a bit of a miss for me given the topic. It was a tad too theatrical. But kudos for going there. It definitely makes an impact.
Hey, developer here, we just released a couple new short scary demos, would you be interested in checking them out?
https://vidas-salavejus.itch.io/vermilion-arcade-horror-collection-demo