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Hey! Thank you very much for your feedback!

I get all your points and I agree with almost every ones.

Theme/Maps

Yes, I didn't go in details on the theme. I had little time to join the jam, so I decided to put all the effort into the raw rules part.

Regarding the two maps you right but I was trying to stretch the borders of the theme, the map during the game is representing at the same time two different things at the same time in my mind:

1- The physical distance of the people 

2- The emotional closeness of the people 

I could have laid down the same concept in two different maps or by having all the player have a fixed map in front of them that was able to communicate with the map of the other player(actually, this idea is a good abstraction of the sense8 characters scattered around the world) but it seemed more elegant like this for a mechanic point of view at the time, so I choose to stick to it.

Tone and style

Yes, I should have done better examples, it is true, but I laid out the game as the first draft for a first playtest, so for me this submission is a bit messy but contains everything that I need to test for choosing what to keep, what to waste and what to change. :)

Elegance

Without a first test, I'm not able to tell you if it works properly, anyway the end of a scene should make the map change in a way that pulls the Protagonist closer to one of the two other characters, Yin and Yang.

Easy to understand

English is not my main language so I think this part of the reasons why the rules are not very clear.

Thank you for telling me. :)

Thank you again for the feedback Sam, I appreciated it so much! :D

This really helps me understand some of what I was struggling to understand from reading the game as-is.  I think adding a graphical element - an actual laid out, almost game-board like Emotional Closeness Map - that was entirely conceptual, would really bring that part home.  I would love to try this game where my physical proximity is one half of play, but my emotional proximity is also in play.  That would be amazing!!