Heyo! The storytelling is really good so far. Tag that along with your descriptiveness of the characters actions and those around and it's like reading a script for RPG movie. Something I'd like to note is keep in mind, your expansive options of choices and how they can connect, the selection page of 5 choices and if possible, have them relay to one another so they meet up in the end for the next singular decision. Ps. keep and eye on grammar and punctuation too!