Hi Alex!
Sorry for the delayed feedback, things get hectic for me over here.
I for one loved the game, as I am someone who has experienced moving around quite a bit and had longed for "home". Funny thing is, once I became a little accustomed to my newer environment I found that I loved both places and didn't really feel like either place was home anymore as I could appreciate and love something from both. Anyway onward to the feedback! But quick note, I still haven't played toward the other endings aside from the Lemeria one.
Gameplay:
- Pretty standard visual novel on Renpy which is pretty much story heavy but with visuals like a picture book. The queues, timings and overall experience was great though.
- The gameplay is pretty much the story heavily text driven but aided with audio and visual queues. That said, occasionally, some of the text would break the immersion and add confusion as mentioned in some of the other feedback. I suggest finding an editor, I feel like there has got to be some volunteers out there or someone willing to contribute a little bit to this cause, just feel free and ask in the discord.
Audio:
- The music was pretty and simple but most of all it fit well and complimented the story and experience providing the player/reader with immersion.
- SFX provided solid context of the environment and situation the character was in providing both immersion and context for the setting.
Visuals:
- I'm not a great judge of visual quality as I'm actually colorblind but everything in my opinion was beautiful and worked to deliver and excellent story. Nothing felt like it broke the experience for me or was too difficult for me to see.
- The transitions and timing were well executed to give visual queues that complimented and helped to tell the story visually without descriptive text.
Other Feedback:
- Your story should come with a trigger warning as it can evoke memories or thoughts in some readers who have experienced feelings and thoughts related to negative isolating behaviors or self harm. I don't want to really mention anything too much as to spoil the story and no self-harm was particularly mentioned in your story but it can be inferred metaphorically.
- I applaud you for moving forward, writing this story must have been difficult for you but it also is a testament of your acknowledgement of the paths laid before you. Getting stuck in the past can be such a negative spiral that is hard to break from but I have hopes that you found a path forward.
I felt emotionally attached to this story and loved it, I hope after some editing and taking account all the feedback, you would release this to the greater audience of steam and continue to share your story.
Thank you for your time and sharing your story!
Regards,
- Glim