Superb writing. Some of the grammer issues confused me from time to time, along with minor typos, but the most important thing you nailed: Character interaction. In the first few minutes of playing this game, I expected some pretty generic stuff and was just gonna skip through it straight to the porn. But the interaction with Maria and the reaction to the Fist of the North Star chicken was superb. I cackled like a madman when Elizabeth and the Protagonist were about to kiss and defaulted to the OK hand gesture when caught, but Ari's reaction played off of it perfectly, not trying overly hard to convince me its funny, but instead letting the joke itself do the work rather than the explanation. Thats just the opening sequence to boot. Long story short, you made exploring every dialogue option a treat, and that significantly increased the time I sunk into the game as well as how much I enjoyed it. Hope the feedback helps, and keep up the good work!