Hello again! I've finally got to watch your VOD. I really enjoyed the voices you did. It makes me wish I could afford adding voicework to the game T_T it makes the scenes a bit more comical and lively. I also noticed you missed the opportunity to click every glossary term that came up in yellow font in the dialogue box. Perhaps I need a better way to tell players it's available... especially "Eden's curse" being really comical in the glossary.
You did a rather amazing job guessing at the pickpocket scene! You had the right idea but removed it at times. But I am definitely okay with players failing that mini-game since that is what Robin wants to happen. I can't wait for the designer to make a better UI for the scene.
The choice scene at the archery was aiming the crosshair mouse anywhere in the butt area "What is adventure without risk?" and any of the 3 target wreaths as "All or nothing," I'm definitely a bit stuck on how to clue players onto the first bit being an actual choice... It wasn't a problem when it was just boxed choices to pick from with the same text.
Thanks again for the thorough critique (: I hope the rest of the game will meet your expectations.