Hello! Welcome to Feedback Quest 8! My name's Hythrain, a co-host and one of the streamers for this event! This feedback is being written live as I stream your game! If you're interested in seeing my live reaction, let me know and I can send you a link to the VOD once it's posted to YouTube!
So my normal approach for any game in these events is simple: I get the game, make sure it's not a virus, then play it with as little information on how to play as possible. This way, I can judge how intuitively someone can figure out the game. Only if it's obvious that I need to read more will I do so. I note this so you can get a sense where some of these feedback comes from. In addition, I want to note that feedback and rating are different; don't use this feedback to gauge what I'll rate, nor should you view my rating as entirely indicative of my feedback.
This... was so interesting to play. It was also so short that I was able to play it a second time. For what's primarily a conversation between two people, it's very well written and does a great job of conveying the idea of whatever the mysterious demi is. Also, it has an amazing choice for background music. Any chance you could link me to it? I saw what it was called in the credits, but when I searched it I found a completely different song. Nevermind, I found it within minutes of ending my stream an- oh. Oh no. That's... oh...
Given the very short nature of this, there's no really any room for feedback. At best, I'd probably just like to see a couple more images. Watch the demi move around as he talks, maybe even close his eye or just blink. But that's really it. There's nothing else that needs to be done.
That said, I did catch one thing. There is a very egregious writing error towards the end of the route where you learn about the demi. Instead of "Thank you for spending your last moments on Earth with me" it's written as "Thank you for send our last moments on earth with me."
Thank you for such a lovely game.