I’m a bit late to the party here but this missions is up there with Convergence, Music from a Darkened Room and other intensely plotted procedurals that reach a whole new level. The attention to detail is fantastic, and like all great DG content the players will feel like real investigators unravelling something horrific.
The USP of memory loss is absolutely fantastic, and your decision to structure the campaign to include a middle-section flashback scenario is very cinematic - it’s like Memento, Weapons or Magnolia. Then you have the social commentary, the groundedness and grit of interfacing with these public institutions. Chef’s kiss for sure!
Finally there’s the absurdly professional design quality of the document. This thing feels like it should have a monetary value, and would lend itself to print extremely well. I’m impressed by the publishing quality design immensely and it’s made me want to set my sights up for my next submission!
Overall a fantastic read and I want to run it for my players soon, any table would get a kick out of this before that kick turned into existential terror.