Can you not take critisicm? This person is being kind and you are literally insulting them.
By the way the music is not great when it comes to the music theory behind it. It disobeys every single thing taught in music class (if the composer took it). You are using multiple minor seconds not even in a melodic way or to support the chord. The chormatic bass line would fit if the melody wasn't just going F - E - F - E (Fa - Mi - Fa - Mi if you use Solfege). And it spends awhile on a tritone which in this context DOES NOT FIT.