While the track has a lot of interesting elements, I don't find it faithful to the theme. The glitchy sounds, global detune, and sound design are actually pretty well balanced and coherent with each other, it creates a calm but uncanny vibe and you created a suspending tension that's really interesting. However as I said it does not serve the theme at all.
Other than the correlation to theme, I find that this track lacks some bass, some ear candy to make it feel whole. Without a bass, the drums feel parallel to the track, I think a simple electronic bass line would make a more solid rhythm section.
For the composition, I feel like your choice of using neutral thirds and your melody overall would actually work really well with some swelling pads of some sort, the chord progression is simple but very efficient for this theme.
Looking forward to your future submissions !