This isn't a bad track at all, theres a bit of randomness to the actual notation that makes the melodies and composition seem a but uneasy and unstructured, not quite like just random notes are being pressed but more so like the tracks sort of just becomes pads and atmos around those tones and not quite the other way around. Typically with creating ambience / ambient music the primary foot forward should be that space and atmosphere, things like melodies, motifs, even traditional composition sequencing aren't really at the front.
The way track 1 plays directly into track 2 is perfect, really great cut there and the mixing is consistent between both tracks. The only thing I do notice is there's really nothing in the higher range of dynamics here, which makes the track seem so much more darker and industrial than the reference picture provided.
Pretty good pieces, good work.