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This was an interesting story.

I liked how it focused on the development of different kinds of torture devices.

But I especially like how each of them was described from both an artistic and a painful perspective, with pros and cons.

The final act was also very horrifying, and I loved it even if I saw it coming from a mile away.

The execution of that ending made the experience of this story worth it.

The only thing I had a problem with was the middle act of the story.

I felt that the pace suffered from the repetitiveness and redundancy of some of the events there.

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Thanks a lot! Glad you liked it :)


By the middle act, what do you mean? 🤔

Also was the ending really that obvious? 😅

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I'm talking about the repetition of some scenes like "consultation with X character", "talk while walking down the street", and "talk in the cafeteria".

I believe that the entire research process took a bit longer than necessary due to these factors. 

That's also why I had the impression that some of these felt a bit redundant, like the consultation with Elizabeth, for example.

There was a certain point where I think that the story could have moved on to the final act without experiencing these scenes again.

About the "I saw it coming from a mile away", I didn't mean negatively, in case you had that impression. 

I just guessed what was going to happen in the end (except for the use of the winning torture device or the warning of Harry), thanks to the foreshadowing through the story.

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Ohhh I see.



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I was in the final stages of my own final project at the time so I used my experiences while writing the story and laying it out. I wrote it so that it feels like what a normal group of students would do when faced with their graduation project (despite the field) in a more realistic way.

Also yeah the losing teams facing the death penalty was probably obvious, but using the winning torture method is what I intended to keep hidden :)