This is one of the highlights of the jam for me. Great flow, well-paced, and well-organized: in a lesser story, the multiple scene breaks and the bold/colored text might have been distracting or messy, but here they work effectively and provide clarity. If I have any criticism for this story, it's extremely minor: I would have liked to see a little less exposition in the first column, to give you more space for detail as Graum sees all the past authors' mistakes.