Great story. I loved that you used the theme in a bad, like a "whoops, they were close enough". I haven't seen that done yet. A downside for me personally (I'm not up on all the OPR lore, but im learning a lot during this jam) is that you never mention what the main character is. For people who know the OPR lore already it might work fine, but it forced me to go read through the lore page quickly to know it was mummified undead (and i hope im right). Shadow Stalkers I know already, so that was fine for me. So yeah, if i knew the lore it would be fine? I know it might sound like a silly gripe, and it probably is. I'm not marking you down for it. It made me go read more lore after all, so maybe it's a good thing? Idk. Still a fantastic job overall. Sorry for my essay.
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Thanks for the response! No apologies needed, i agree with you lol. I got too amped to delve into a narrative description that I neglected the labels needed to accurately describe character origins and species which can be pretty necessary when a universe like this is so large and diverse. Definitely something for me to remember next time around.