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I really wanted to like this piece, but it didn't quite land for me. I love the concept that you chose, and I like the structure of "increasingly desperate assassination attempts culminating in doing it yourself".  But there was a vagueness here that stopped me from really getting invested in the story, and I think part of it is that your chosen concept/structure is simply too much for the one-page limit.

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Thank you. I guess it was a little ambitious...I tried to make the links obvious without being obvious, which as you say didn't land in the one page limit! Gotta keep trying! 😁