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I did not see the twist at the end coming. Good job. It made me go read the Soul Snatcher lore. I would recommend conveying who is speaking closer to the beginning of a wall of speech sooner than you have in some cases. I wasn't aware the speaker had changed at times because it took three sentences before the "they said|" came. Either a "person nodded, 'speech'" or after the first sentence will clear that up. Otherwise, good job.

Thank you! I had to move some of the dialog descriptors around and delete others. Came in right at 998 words. I'll see about fine tuning that better next time. 

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Oh, I understand the stress. I think mine came to 997 in the end. But I was constantly going over and then back under during the many rounds of edits. It was good, stressful fun.