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I enjoyed the story, thanks for sharing! A few comments for feedback:

- Try to focus on a single narrative thread. There's the history of the planet, the invasion and the destruction of the caste system all in less than 1k.

- Paragraphs could do with being a bit shorter for easier reading

- Some more descriptions could have done a lot to get us engaged with the story!