The atmosphere in this is fantastic. The adventure hook is clear and direct. I liked this a lot. Strong and fun purple prose that fits the assignment quite well. Good job.
Thank you so much for the kind words; it means a lot. I'm especially glad you enjoyed the strong and fun purple prose, as my main goal was to use that classic Appendix N style to build a powerful atmosphere. It is great to know it landed effectively and that the hook felt clear and direct.
