Love the art style of this game. I also like the difference in approach to the "Loop" theme!
I think the narrative element is really strong and has potential to be a good full-fledged game. I really hope you do that. I'd be very interested in it!
There's tons of minor improvements you can make to the system but nothing you dont already know about. It's difficult to do all the optimizations for a game jam! But you did amazing in the time you had!