oh, and another thing i found just now. you used the wrong name here in the beginning of the second paragraph -- should be "aster" rather than "jasper". this is only a little later in the same chapter as the one above. love your story, and i hope these comments help you! <3
(and yes, i did change it to dark mode for this screenshot whereas the first one was light mode. found the button in the settings menu lol, forgot that it was there.)