This game has a lot of potential! The writing and art are great, and the world you've built is pretty convincing. I'd say the first thing you should do on if you continue working on this game is polish the game up in various ways. Make the title screen all pretty, make sure the gameplay looks and feels consistent, and that the player can't fall off the map in any scenario (I managed to do it by walking right after talking to the creature). With some polish, I think you could have a great game on your hands :)