I've literally just started the game, but I have to stop and compliment you here for the incredible first scene, the excellent use of flavour comments for additional backstory and flair (spoiler: the "O Positive" comment was brilliant). I can't wait to play through the whole thing!
Beautifully written!!! Short but powerful and the snippets of backstory were *chef's kiss*
I wish the story allowed for more closure for the MC, and some more exploration of the killer's motives (for example, why they even dated MC in the first place - was it to try and blind them to the truth?)
I'm sure describing the ambiance despite having muted "ghost senses" was a challenge (I'm not sure ghosts can smell things? lol) but you still did what I thought was a great job!