¡Ay, pobre Poe Poe! She really can't catch a break, can she? Escaping one bad situation just to land in another—even if it was more enjoyable than the first, in a way, heh—only to have THAT fall apart, too...
And considering everything that happens to her, I personally would've loved for the narrative to linger on these moments a little longer, rather than moving so quickly from moment to moment as it does~ That is, with the rollercoaster of huge life changes and intimate encounters that unfold in the story, Poe Poe and Heather alike have a lot on their plates to discuss and digest, even on a day-to-day level, no? I bet there'd be a plethora of fun scenes that'd result if the narrative handled their thorny emotional entanglements with more of a slow burn approach, examining their respective messy, conflicting desires in detail and letting the poor girls simmer in them at length~
In any case, nice work on your VN; I hope to see more from you in the future!