I do agree that there are a lot of things happening; that's one of the reasons why I'm doing a rewrite to try to pace it more naturally. I tend to let my thoughts wander while writing or planning, so I get that it can put people off. As for the ROs lacking depth, well, I'll just have to try and do better next time—something I can't promise since I'm still learning as I go. Though, if it's too frustrating for you, it might just not be your cup of tea or how you envisioned the game going. I won't meet everyone's expectations, including yours. That's okay, it happens.
Thanks for your input.