This was excellent. I loved how self absorbed Jinx is and how she measures the literal passage of time based on her relevance to the line numbers lol. I did not expect the story to turn out that way, learning more about Avery was really fun and it changed the whole dynamic of the story in a great way.
The art and presentation on display is so perfect for a theater setting, the double-outline on the character makes them stand out even more from the background like I imagine actual actors would.
I also really appreciated hearing all of your thoughts at the end, I completely understand the struggle of bringing something that’s perfect in your mind and pulling it through that threshold into reality and being forced to reckon with the differences. I think your outlook on it is really good though, there really is no reason you can’t return to these characters or this story, I wish that was normalized more than it is.