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I enjoyed reading this and think it has a lot of potential. One suggestion though, the summary led me to expect an alien, but the aliens don't come off as alien much at all. You might want to add something to manage people's expectations so they don't wind up disappointed, hoping to romance the equivalent of the Predator- though that might just be me, lol. Good luck with your story!

Hi, thanks for taking the time to read Primal and for the heads up!  I went back through the blurb and I definitely see how it could give that impression 🙂I don't use the word alien so I'm not sure how to best clarify that Xi'tal is more man than alien, let me know if you have any suggestions 🙂

You could add a detail about him looking human after his name, or maybe add a separate section where you describe the LI after the summary?

Thanks for the feedback! I will go in and add this now :)