I can sort of see where you're coming from , but the first 1:10 intro doesn't particularly feel evocative of the picture, it sounds like you're establishing the male lead, but it also doesn't sound a lot like I envision him being personally from the picture given.
Perhaps more pointedly, it's like a four minute piece, which I understood to be twice the length permitted. In context of gaming music, this could totally work in the context of a game's intro or a long cinematic. It's hard to do story driven music - where the end state and start state are quite different - outside of those contexts in games, because you often don't have a ton of control over how quickly the player receives the context (or for very narrative based games, perhaps even how the way in which they interact with it might change the direction the music should take)
Really nice piece though.