Some items for your consideration:
Some typos for you, (found in public version 0.11.1):
(Day 13)
Akatsuki - '...Every so often, however, her gaze seems to wander and she goes out of her way to check if you're still hard, and then make you so if you're not...'
probably should be'...then makes you...'
(Day 22)
MC - '...You check, but Victoria is still fast asleep, so you leave her to lay in a little longer as usual...'
probably should be'...to lie in...'
(Day 23)
MC - '...I do, good girl...'
probably should be'...I did, good...'
(Day 25)
narration - '...She doesn't stop walking though, simply clinging to you arm for support, obdiently willing to go whereever you lead her...'
probably should be '...go wherever you...'