There isn’t much to judge story-wise yet. The premise is intriguing enough, the voice-in-your-head works pretty well, the writing is pretty good. As for the presentation, I understand the idea of not seeing the background, but when the text talks about seeing pawprints or chimes or claw marks etc. it breaks down. Very blurry photographs would have been good here. The sound effects were nice, though. Overall, can’t say I particularly want to see the rest of the story, but there’s some good stuff.