There's plenty to like in here – the conversational first-person narration suits the light tone of the story, the UI is simple but clean, and the character art is just so pleasant and emotive. Some polish issues are present (including a couple of your/you're and there/their mixups, as far as typos go) but the writing is smooth to read.
I guess the elephant in the room would be that not a lot happens so far. Hints about future plot events are quite sparse; we only really get the basic premise explained and the characters introduced. While the unhurried pacing is not bad for the kind of story being told, it feels like this version is all setup and no payoff, which just kind of makes it difficult to love as a jam entry.